Wednesday, March 28, 2007

Update on paper

The paper I blogged about a few days ago. I received the grade today, 9/10. My professor is incredibly picky, so frustratingly so that I'm pretty freaked out about writing the final paper (12-15 freaking pages long!!). But the grade is good on this paper so I guess if I can suck it up and take criticism from him, it wont be too bad.

He said my thesis statement wasn't enough to the point. Let me show you my final draft of the thesis statement.

"Without assistance, only those born into wealth will have the opportunity to receive the kind of education that gives them an advantage over those who would otherwise be stuck in a never-ending cycle of under privilege and societal discrimination, i.e.: discrimination from higher social classes."

He also said that I'm trying too hard. Um...yeah, I wonder why :P

I'm just happy that this is my final English class because I think my head is going to explode. As you all can tell, I'm not a good writer and this is really sucking.

5 comments:

Lei said...

Hey, I once had a professor write on one of my papers, "You have serious writing problems". Lol!

Stuart said...

Where is he? Time to do some breaking of the thumbs!

garaghty said...

Yay for final English classes! When do you graduate?

QueenMeadow said...

Never? haha

No, I have about 3 years to go :S slow going.

MusicalMom said...

See, professors like that scare me! Writing is subjective, anyway...