Friday, March 23, 2007

Any smarty pants writers reading right now?

I'm writing a controversial research paper for my class this semester. My problem is that I tend to get wordy, I know! its shocking ;) My other problem is that I don't like controversy, lol. So I keep trying to soften the "blow" of my thesis statement.

I need to turn in a report that includes my thesis statement (and the bibliography, so its not the whole paper yet) but its so wordy and doesn't feel right yet.

Here it is...

In order to increase the success of all students, those that are less economically privileged that are unable to pay for private schools, school vouchers will provide the means necessary for parents to choose a school that they feel will benefit their child the most therefore increase the success rate of their child.


My paper is on School Vouchers and I had to choose a side so I went with the side for vouchers.

Help!!! fast too, please :) Its due in 4.5 hours, eek!

5 comments:

QueenMeadow said...

My hunny came to my rescue and helped me fix it up :)

I guess I should not procrastinate so long that it ends up being a friday afternoon when no one really checks my blog :P

Lena said...

You are a blogging queen! I love all the pictures!

Stuart said...

Ya know, writing is a large part of what I do for a living, so... yeah ;)

Amber said...

How did you do on the paper?

QueenMeadow said...

I have to wait until friday to find out!! I'm dyin' here.